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07-15-2008, 02:13 AM
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Free periods in the library = boring.
Second part of Raphael's turning which I started writing a while ago, look back through the posts if you haven't read it.
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The thirst burned at Raphael's throat, hotter and more powerful than anything he had ever experienced before. It clawed at his insides and made him writhe on the ground in pain. It drove him, it devoured him, it consumed him.
In seconds Raphael was on his feet feeling stronger and more powerful than he ever had before. The world was clearer, sharper. Small cracks stood out as clear as day on the footpath below him.
Then came the scent.
It hit him like a hammer blow, making him reel backwards as it invaded his nostrils and took hold of his reason. People rushed back and forth at the alley mouth in front of him and he knew he could resist them no longer. Raphael lunged for the kill, aiming to get who ever he could sink his teeth in to.
Zane stopped the limo out the front of the alleyway. Lillith swung open the back door and sat patiently with a glass of blood in hand. On cue, the crowed parted in a sea of screams and a teenage boy landed in the limo. The door to the limo slammed shut and with utmost precision Lillith sat on Raphael and pinned him down, trying to avoid the snapping snarling teeth. Zane pushed the pedal as far down as it would go and the pink limo was gone around a corner in seconds, leaving only shell shocked pedestrians and foul smelling smoke in its wake.
Behind the dark screen, Zane heard Lillith struggling with their newest catch. He was a strong one - that was for sure - and made even stronger by the lack of blood in his system. The limo began to jerk wildly, nearly being shifted off the road as Zane fought to hold on to control of the wheels. "What the hell is going on back there?" There was no reply from the back carriage, all though the struggles contined and then ceased immediatly. Zane breathed a sigh of relief. Vampires were always stronger when they were starving. Lillith must have gotten some blood in to him.
Her voice drifted in from behind the partition. "Zane, find a place to pull over. Better yet, take us home."
"Yours or mine?"
"Hmm... Could be messy trying to get him clean... Yours."
Zane shut his eyes and grimaced in anger. He hated cleaning up.
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07-15-2008, 07:28 PM
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coowl ^^
can't wait to read more ^^.. Zane is interesting =D
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07-18-2008, 06:38 AM
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I'm on a roll at the moment, so here's the next part of the true story-line =)
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Corinne awoke to Shanae lying on the bed above her, hands behind her head and seeming impatient. Corinne continued to look up at her for a few minutes with Shanae seemingly ignorant to her. She studied the girls features, from the top of her short dark hair to the bottom of her feet – still covered in socks – and everything in between. Shanae twisted her head and met the girls gaze. Corinne opened her mouth to start quoting a clichéd excuse, but stopped when she saw Shanae's smile. Corinne, still half asleep, muttered something under her breath. Shanae giggled, almost as if she heard her. Corinne smiled as well. The two lay in silence, just staring at each other. The silence crept on and neither one had the heart nor will to break it. It wasn't uncomfortable, it wasn't awkward. It just was. Shanae sat up on the bed and slid off it on to the floor. Carefully, she stepped over to Corinne. Corinne watched with baited breath, not making a sound and not willing to move in case she was still sleeping and this was just a dream. Shanae knelt down in front of her, their faces so close that Corinne could see the individual lashes above Shanae's eyes. Corinne shifted backwards so that there was room for Shanae to crawl underneath the blankets with her. Soon they were laying face to face, bodies touching. Corinne's breathing was haggard and un-even, while Shanae's remained calm and soft. Shanae slowly wrapped an arm around Corinne's head, stroking the side of her face softly. Corinne moved her head in and lay it on Shanae's chest, mumbling incoherently once again before drifting back off to sleep.
Raphael said his goodbyes to Ashton and clutched his prize close to his chest as the morning light shone cheerily through the houses opposite. Another school day had dawned, and it was time he had his talk with Shanae.
He swished upstairs in seconds and slowly opened the door to Shanae's room and gasped at what he saw.
Corinne lay in Shanae's arms, gasping and writhing in ecstacy as Shanae delicately kissed up and down her neck. She opened her mouth wide, revealing her pearly white teeth and lunged for the young girls neck.
Raphael was there in a heartbeat and wrenched Shanae off of Corinne and pinned her to the wall, anger flaring in his eyes. Shanae glared back at him, the tension causing the air betwen them to quiver. Both were ignorant of Corinne still on the floor behind them, panting as if she had just run a marathon. Raphael glanced back at her before turning back to Shanae. "Did you bite her?"
Shanae was silent for a second, her face twitching slightly in to a small smirk. She looked up at Raphael, mischief evident in her eyes. "Only a little bit... Not enough to draw blood but enough to make her want more."
Raphael dropped her and she landed gracefully on her feet. He knelt down beside Corinne and inspected her. There was nothing wrong aside from the quivering in her legs, which he attributed to exhaustion. Without looking up, he addressed Shanae. "Go downstairs. Get something to eat. Go to school. I'll take care of her."
Shanae looked down at the girls still body. Anger flared in her chest at the sight of what she had done, quickly replaced with sorrow as she thought of what Raphael must have gone through back... Back before she had been changed. She made her way to the quickly a little too quickly and opened the fridge, then stood there with her mouth wide open.
All the blood that they had collected the night before was gone. Not a single packet left. She was about to go and tell Raphael, when she had a thought.
Shanae exited through the back door and sat silently outside the house, waiting. As fast as lightning, she jumped and caught a bird in mid-flight and landed into a neat roll, the birds neck broken and it's blood draining in to her mouth. With a satisfied sigh, she wiped of the blood around her mouth with the back of her hand and then sucked it into her mouth. She grinned, and walked back inside to get her school things ready, not taking a second thought that the woman to whom she had just confessed her love to was laying upstairs with her Vampire ex-boyfriend.
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07-18-2008, 07:22 AM
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Oh thats not something i expected but i love een more now beasue this makes it perfect now that she is also a vampire. I see that everyhting that she a Raphael is never going to be the same but with her and corrince it is just going to be awesome. I love it.
And now you made me want even more!!!!!!!!
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07-24-2008, 08:21 AM
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Haha glad to know I can still, after 25(!) pieces of writing for this, along with three short spin offs, enrapture my audience Kris =)
I'd like to say thanks to all of you who have CONTINUED to persevere with me writing this and reading it almost religiously. If none of you read it, I probably would have stopped long ago cos Goddess knows Myspace people are useless at reading and commenting blogs haha.
So, enjoy the next chapter, it's a good long one for ya =)
Raffxo
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Raphael quickly gave Corinne a once over, noting that there were indeed bite marks in some places, but none that had drawn blood. The girl looked up at him groggily, as if she didn't quite recognise who he was. She started to speak, but Raphael told her to hush. She nodded. "My legs are shaking..." Raphael glanced down and saw the the girls legs were quivering like a leaf. He began to question her, but her eyes were closed and her breathing steady. Blood was pumping just below the skin, rich, sweet, delicious crimson blood... Before Raphael knew what he was doing, he lifted the girls wrist to his mouth and bit carefully in to it. He moaned silently as the rich liquid poured forth in to his mouth. It always tasted better straight from the vein. He sucked passionately, careful to keep an ear out to monitor her heart beat so he could stop if she lost too much blood. Their union seemed to last hours, but was only a few minutes until the fateful time when her body began to show signs of fatigue associated with blood loss. Raphael regretfully drew his lips from her wrist and watched the wound close over with just a red mark where the bite previously was. He lifted the girl up and laid her down comfortably on the bed before hastily scrawling a sick note and forging a doctors signature to hand in to the school as to why she wasn't there, before grabbing his keys and getting in the car to go to school.
Shanae entered the school gates and was immediatly mobbed by friends who barraged her with questions about why she was living with Raphael instead of her father. She was shocked at first, before realising that it had been almost a week since she had become a Vampire, and thus temprorarily moving out of home. She mumbled something about problems with her brothers - which wasn't exactly a lie - and changed the topic to the recent Miss Universe contest and how pretty her dress was. The ruse worked and the subject was immediatly dropped in favour of new clothes and the models (or ****s as they were sometimes referred to). The bell rang before she knew it and Shanae seperated from her friends and picked her way to her locker when a cool arm wrapped around her throat and something heavy landed on her back. With a scream, Shanae spun herself around and came face to face with her grinning attacker.
Eric jumped down off of her back and hugged her. Shanae glared at him. "That wasn't funny! You almost gave me a heart attack!"
Eric tilted his head to one side and crossed his arms, tapping his fingers on his forearms. Shanae sighed and grinned before signing to him.
-You loser. Where have you been lately?
-I was just about to ask you the same thing. Rumour has it that you're living with 'that boy' and the new girl.
Shanae sighed. -Yeah, but not permenantly. The new girl doesn't live with us, she's just always over.
Eric took hold of that piece of information and ran with it, curious to hear the whole story. -And why, pray tell, is she always over? Raphael is a ladies man but she's not his type.
Shanae praised whatever deity was listening that her cheeks would no longer flush crimson and give her away with a maidens blush. -Her Mum works nights. Listen, I've got to get to class, I'll talk to you later, okay?
-You've got Philosophy next, and so do I. You can tell me then.
Eric grinned devilishly, as if he already knew what was going on. Shanae groaned inwardly because she thought the same. -Alright, then let's go and I'll fill in some blanks on the way there.
Eric grinned and high fived her, before wrapping one arm around her shoulder to shephard her while she ditched signing in favour for writing on a blank piece of paper as they walked.
Raphael pulled in to the schoolyard just as the bell went, so he waited patiently in his car and checked himself for any stray blood that may have made its way into his hair or clothes after his improptu breakfest this morning before walking to the head office and handing in the note from Corinne's 'Mother' and explaining why she wasn't to be at school today. He cracked his neck twice as he came out of the office, grateful for the release he felt afterwards. As he made his way to his first class, he noticed a scrap of paper on the windowsill of a classroom. He grabbed it as he walked past and breezed over its contents. His eyes stopped halfway down the page and he froze. The next second, he was gone and the scrap of paper floated delicately to the ground.
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07-25-2008, 06:17 AM
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Hey Raff, sorry I havn't posted but I have been reading. Momento Mori is sooooooo addicting. lol Hey! I'm one of those myspace people =p lol
Corrinne & Shanae, wow!
lol Eric gotta love him.
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07-28-2008, 04:51 PM
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What was on that peice of paper. I need to know. You can't do this to me. I really need to know these things. And Rapheal can't come between Shanae and Corrinne. Still love it though.
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To what is coming.
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07-29-2008, 02:20 AM
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Shanae followed Eric to the classroom door, where he stopped. She looked at him quizzically. He motioned to continue down the corridor, then signed to her. –I’ll follow you soon, I need to tell the teacher that we can’t be in the class.
Shanae began to speak but Eric turned his back to her and was signing to the teacher, who stood there trying to decipher him. Shanae walked down the corridor and stopped at the corner, leaning against the wall to wait for Eric. A few seconds later, he walked out of the classroom, his shoulders shaking as if he was laughing. Shanae felt a twang of guilt. She wondered what Erics laugh would sound like. He caught up to her and motioned for her to follow him out the emergency exit. Shanae’s eyes lit up like fireworks. They always did this in year 7. The disabled the fire alarm connected to the door and snuck out, breaking in to a run once they were clear of the building.
Raphael appeared at the corridor seconds after the two of them left. He ducked his head in to the classroom. “Umm… Mrs. Knight? Are Shanae and Eric in here?”
Mrs. Knight glared at him. She was one of the few teachers that didn’t seem to fall for his Vampiric charm. “No, Raphael. They were sent to Principal Amos’ office. I suggest you try looking for them there, or perhaps even go back to class?”
Raphael retained his cool and stared her dead in the eye. “Perhaps I should. Continue with your lesson.” Raphael swung around and marched back down the corridor, speedily disappearing as soon as he was out of sight and appearing in front of the Principals door a few seconds later. He heard nothing inside. Swearing, Raphael dashed back to the corridor and tried to smell them out, like he should have done from the start. He took a sniff, and was immediately rewarded with the scent of Corinne and Eric. Both were familiar to him, but Eric’s was unusually familiar… He sniffed again and followed the trail to the door. The alarm was disconnected, so he pushed through and broke in to daylight outside. The scent started to become fuzzy in the spiralling air-currents outside. Cursing silently, Raphael dashed off after the trail.
He turned a corner and Eric’s fist collided with the side of his face. It was as he was on the ground reeling from the attack that he recognised Eric’s scent. The boys face hovered above his vision as his body fought to combat the damage it had received. Raphael didn’t know if he was imagining it or not, but Eric’s face seemed to change slightly as he stared at it, becoming the scarred and weathered face that had haunted Raphael throughout visions most of his life.
“So good to see you again, Raff.” Cerberus lifted Raphael on to his shoulder and sped off.
All Raphael could hear was the wind in his ears and Lilliths voice in his head saying over and over. “I’m sorry, I’m sorry. I’m so, so, so sorry!”
The not drifted out of Raphael’s pocket, landing face up.
‘Eric, I’m in love with the girl next door. Her name’s Corinne. She’s smart, funny, absolutely hypo and really sorta kinky… I just don’t know how Raphael would take it. I told you about him being a Vampire, yeah?’
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07-29-2008, 07:25 AM
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WHAT!!!!!!!!!! omg no she! No he!!!!! omg omg omg omg omg omg
MoRe!
hun you can't just leave us hanging. It's not fair. *trying very hard not to pout*
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"aller au diable. gehen in die Hölle. du-te la dracu."
I am strong, for I am a Corvinus. I will survive.
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07-31-2008, 08:01 PM
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SWEET!!!!!!!! Thats is all I can say!!!!!!
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Follow Me Into The Darkness,
Hideing In Your Mind.
Get Lost Forever,
In The Black Abyass.
Let go of the pain,
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Never look back,
At once was.
Only look ahead,
To what is coming.
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