My story.
this is what i have written so far i am afraid i am not very good at grammer so please for give me if i have poor grammer, also i would like to thankyou for taking the time to read this. this stroy is a book that i have started to write and before i wrote anymore i wanted to find out what people thought of it so please give me your thoughts.
part one
Now for some you may think a vampire is some blood sucking monster that kills and drinks blood, well some aspect of that are true. Yes I do drink blood, but I am no killer. The year is 1591, I am 17 years old and I am a vampire. At the age of 17 I became a creature of the night. He made me what I am today; Vincent taught me everything I know. I am unaware of who made him a vampire or how he even became one all I no is that he was the one who created me I guess. I guess at this point your more than confused and have many questions im sure so ill clear it all up for u this is a story about my life.
I came to the world in the usual way I had a family, a nice house. My father was lord of the manor of which I was heir too. My father died when I was 16 years old and I became lord of the manor and all the land of which he owned I was so young I didn’t no what to do. But I managed for the next year things were going smoothly and I was happy again. It was June 30 my birthday and I had decided to throw a massive party in honour of the occasion I remember this day as if it were yesterday it was five minutes to midnight when he arrived. I remember him introducing himself “My lord it is an honour my name is Vincent Trillium”. We made small talk at first as I found this man very interesting the way he dressed, the way he spoke. He was tall with shoulder length brown hair with a long black leather coat with a waist coat that was some colour I had never seen before it was a deep red and a white shirt and a sliver ring with some crest of some sort on it, I had asked him what it was and he said “it’s a symbol of what we are”.
Vincent stayed with me for the following year as he was a man with great knowledge and skills, he taught me how to read and write also he taught me the skills of a blade I had learnt a great amount from this man and on the night before my 18th birthday I asked “ Vincent you have given me so much over the past year how can I repay you, I will give u one wish” he smiled and spoke “My lord, My friend I have taught you everything I no for a reason and had hoped that you would join me, join my family” I wasn’t sure what he was really talking about and asked “join you? Im afraid I am not sure what u mean Vincent” he stood up and sighed “Christopher I am not like you I am not of mortal blood” he paused and looked at me “ I am a vampire and my wish is for you to join me” I stood up and ran towards the door but as soon as I turned in a flash he was at the door, I took a step back my heart was pounding but and managed to say “but... how…you” Vincent reassured me and said “Christopher I wont harm you I swear” I sat down he told me of the things he could do and told me everything. He told me of how he never ages how his beauty, his power and speed were all because of what he is he called it his gift and how he wanted me to join him.
part one continuedI’m not sure how long I sat there, thousands of thoughts were going though my head at this time, I thought of the power I could have, what I could look like, to have this power that puts people around you under this spell and for you just to be able to do what ever you want. Never to grow old I would be a god. I looked at Vincent and said “I have made up my mind, I wish to join you”. Vincent smiled and walked towards me and placed his hand on my shoulder and looked deep into my eyes and said “I am sorry” and in an instant he plunged his teeth into my neck, I screamed with pain that echoed though out my manor.
My eyes snapped open I stood up and walked over to the mirror and gazed in wonder I looked so beautiful I was shaking with amazement. My eyes were black as midnight so deep, my jaw dropped and I gasped and moved my hand slowly towards my mouth and touch two fangs that had never been there before. “impressive isn’t it” came a voice from the door, I turned around to see Vincent standing there smiling and looking at what he had created “ I have something for you and he held out his hand and in it was a ring with the same strange symbol. “ This is for you; you are now one of us, part of my family”. I put the ring on my middle finger and said “what now Vincent?” a grin broke across his face “now my friend, we feed” and he turned towards the door and walked out. I got dressed and walked out to the garden to meet him. i walked up to him and asked confused “why are we out here? The carriage Is waiting” Vincent laughed and smiled “Christopher we have no need for horses and carriage anymore, vampires have their own means of travelling, watch” and he ran and like a blot of lightning he disappeared into the forest.
At first I was unsure and began to run and in an instant I had covered 50 feet and was now at the edge of the forest, I took a step back with amazement and turned and jumped, Vincent was at my side and laughed “we have a lot to cover” he sighed “well lets start with the basics” and he darted back to wards the house then stopped and turned to face me “I want you to run at me” he shouted. Feeling rather silly I went into a full out run and was suddenly right next to Vincent “wow” is all I managed to say, Vincent laughed and said “right now we run though the forest” and he turned and disappeared. I speed after him; running was strange it was almost like everything had slowed down and dodging the tress was almost effortless. The rush while running was amazing my senses had high tend to a level above human I was in my words a god and was loving every minute of it.
Last edited by xxel; 06-17-2008 at 03:44 PM.
|
Linear Mode
