Originally Posted by Draven

These were the extent of the suggestions i was going to make, barely much at all:

behing that tree - made a typo on behind

fell victim should be - Fall victim

insain - spelled insane

my tears never stopped to flood - sort of doesn't convey a proper meaning, perhaps you would like to replace with, my tears never stopped their flood?

Excellent poem, however tragic.

Originally Posted by jaweems

quite sad and well written. I write alot so i know how it feels when you start writing something like this. its as though your mind and sould form a distinct connection with the character. its as though you feel every bit of it.
Well at least for me.
and even so, reading gave quite a strong connection as well, which shows you did a good job of writing it.