-bites nails-

oohh, I wanna know what happens next!
I love the way you described the flower at the beginning.
it was a really interesting way to start. the whole story and the way you launched straight in at the action was really gripping.

the only bit i'm confused about it why Shanae screamed when Raphael jumped at her at the beginning, if she's his girlfriend..

can't wait 'till you post the next part. ^____^